Metacognitive Blog: And Then There Were None

From my first draft to my final copy I changed the commentary the most. I probably need to work on that the most too. I wrote my essay then had to read through it again and add the commentary I need. I understand that commentary explains the detail, but I don't really understand how to put it in an essay and have it still flow. I had to add and change my commentary, therefor I had to make sure my essay made sense and flowed correctly. The form of support that helped me the most was sharing my essay with a parent. That  helped me a lot, because my parents didn't know what the book was about and they didn't read it. They helped me add more description and make sure it made sense. Having a peer look over mine helped, but they read the book so they knew what was going on and could infer if I didn't explain something enough. The written feed back on my timed writing helped me a lot with that essay, but I think that it was kind of hard to use it in this essay, because they were different. I think that maybe if you looked at my essay or some of it, then that would help me. I would know a little more of what you wanted my essay to be like. I think that would help at least until I felt more comfortable with writing essays.